四級寫作經典范文及點評:遠離電子游戲
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電子游戲的本質只是一種消譴,一種娛樂。作為學生,我們的本職工作是學習,可以體驗一下電子游戲的樂趣,卻不能深陷其中而無法自拔。
Step Away From the Video Games
Every afternoon hundreds of thousands of youths flood Internet cafes, switch on a game console, or otherwise sit down to involve themselves in intense fantasy worlds.① I’m talking about video games, games like Counter Strike, Diablo, Smash Brothers or Halo. These games can be fun and exciting, but we need to watch out for when this pastime becomes an addiction.
Games are often incredibly exciting and dramatic, but they generally aren’t very intellectual. We don’t learn as much from them as we would simply reading a book, and spending too much time playing them can take away our study time. We need to remember that we are students first and foremost.② Nothing should ever get in the way of proper studying.③
Video games can also be a bad influence on younger children who may be watching. Many video games are violent and the object in most of them is to kill the other players. This does not send the right message to the children who need to be told that violence is not acceptable and need to be taught how to handle situations maturely. Even if we do decide ourselves to sit down and play a violent video game, we need to make sure that it is not influencing the younger people around us.④ [221 words]
行文點評
文章以描述現象開始進入主題,逐步分析原因得出結論并提出呼吁。文章開頭作者先提到一個普遍存在的現象:許多年輕人沉迷于電子游戲。最后一句為過渡句,作者先指出video games非常有趣、刺激,緊接著運用轉折連詞but將話題一轉,順勢提出作者的觀點:我們必須提防不要沉迷于這種消遣。在第二、三兩段中,作者闡明了玩游戲的弊端,每段的首句都是這一段的主題句。第三段結尾處作者用even if提出妥協性的呼吁,為短文畫上一個圓滿的句號。
本文使用了一些精彩的固定搭配,使文章增色不少,例如:第一段中的hundreds of thousands,switch on,take away,first and foremost等等。
好文妙譯
遠離電子游戲
每天下午,成百上千的年輕人就會涌進網吧,接通游戲控制臺,或者坐下來自己一人沉溺于一個緊張的夢幻世界。我說的是電子游戲,像反恐精英、暗黑破壞神、任天堂明星大亂斗或是光環。這些游戲非常有趣、刺激,但我們必須提防不要沉迷于這種消遣之中。
游戲通常都非常刺激、生動,但通常并不能鍛煉智力。玩游戲并不能像讀書那樣學到很多知識,況且花太多時間玩游戲也會占據我們讀書的時間。我們必須記住,首先也是最重要的一點是,我們還是學生。沒有什么應該影響我們正常的學業。
電子游戲對于那些只是觀看的小孩也是一個壞影響。許多電子游戲都非常暴力,其目標大部分都是殺死另外的玩家。對于那些必須教會他們暴力是不正當的,必須教會他們成熟處理事情的孩子來說,這并沒有傳達一個正確的信息。即使我們自己決定坐下來打一場刺激的電子游戲,也必須確保沒有影響到周圍的年輕人。
詞匯斟酌
?console n. 控制臺,游戲臺
?switch on 用開關開啟,接通電源
?intense a. 強烈的,劇烈的,緊張的;專注的,熱情的
?pastime n. 消遣,娛樂
?addiction n. 沉迷,上癮
?incredibly ad. 難以置信地
?intellectual a. 智力的,有才智的
?maturely ad. 成熟地,充分地
?violence n. 暴力
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】hundreds and thousands of...成百上千的…
【臨摹】Within a month, there would be hundreds of thousands of cases and hundreds of thousands of deaths.僅在一個月內,就發生了成百上千的個案以及死亡案例。
②【注釋】first and foremost 首先并且最重要的
【臨摹】He does a bit of writing, but first and foremost he?s a teacher. 他也寫一些文章, 但他主要是個教師。
③【注釋】get in the way of 阻礙
【臨摹】You should never let fear get in the way of you pursuing success.永遠不要讓恐懼成為你追求成功的絆腳石。
④【注釋】even if即使,縱然,盡管
【臨摹】Even if I had to walk there all the way I’ll get there.即使我得一路走著去,我也要走到那里。
思如泉涌
Lookers-on see more than players.當局者迷,旁觀者清。
The time of life is short; to spend that shortness basely, it would be too long.人生苦短,若虛度年華,則短暫的人生就太長了。
Step Away From the Video Games
Every afternoon hundreds of thousands of youths flood Internet cafes, switch on a game console, or otherwise sit down to involve themselves in intense fantasy worlds.① I’m talking about video games, games like Counter Strike, Diablo, Smash Brothers or Halo. These games can be fun and exciting, but we need to watch out for when this pastime becomes an addiction.
Games are often incredibly exciting and dramatic, but they generally aren’t very intellectual. We don’t learn as much from them as we would simply reading a book, and spending too much time playing them can take away our study time. We need to remember that we are students first and foremost.② Nothing should ever get in the way of proper studying.③
Video games can also be a bad influence on younger children who may be watching. Many video games are violent and the object in most of them is to kill the other players. This does not send the right message to the children who need to be told that violence is not acceptable and need to be taught how to handle situations maturely. Even if we do decide ourselves to sit down and play a violent video game, we need to make sure that it is not influencing the younger people around us.④ [221 words]
行文點評
文章以描述現象開始進入主題,逐步分析原因得出結論并提出呼吁。文章開頭作者先提到一個普遍存在的現象:許多年輕人沉迷于電子游戲。最后一句為過渡句,作者先指出video games非常有趣、刺激,緊接著運用轉折連詞but將話題一轉,順勢提出作者的觀點:我們必須提防不要沉迷于這種消遣。在第二、三兩段中,作者闡明了玩游戲的弊端,每段的首句都是這一段的主題句。第三段結尾處作者用even if提出妥協性的呼吁,為短文畫上一個圓滿的句號。
本文使用了一些精彩的固定搭配,使文章增色不少,例如:第一段中的hundreds of thousands,switch on,take away,first and foremost等等。
好文妙譯
遠離電子游戲
每天下午,成百上千的年輕人就會涌進網吧,接通游戲控制臺,或者坐下來自己一人沉溺于一個緊張的夢幻世界。我說的是電子游戲,像反恐精英、暗黑破壞神、任天堂明星大亂斗或是光環。這些游戲非常有趣、刺激,但我們必須提防不要沉迷于這種消遣之中。
游戲通常都非常刺激、生動,但通常并不能鍛煉智力。玩游戲并不能像讀書那樣學到很多知識,況且花太多時間玩游戲也會占據我們讀書的時間。我們必須記住,首先也是最重要的一點是,我們還是學生。沒有什么應該影響我們正常的學業。
電子游戲對于那些只是觀看的小孩也是一個壞影響。許多電子游戲都非常暴力,其目標大部分都是殺死另外的玩家。對于那些必須教會他們暴力是不正當的,必須教會他們成熟處理事情的孩子來說,這并沒有傳達一個正確的信息。即使我們自己決定坐下來打一場刺激的電子游戲,也必須確保沒有影響到周圍的年輕人。
詞匯斟酌
?console n. 控制臺,游戲臺
?switch on 用開關開啟,接通電源
?intense a. 強烈的,劇烈的,緊張的;專注的,熱情的
?pastime n. 消遣,娛樂
?addiction n. 沉迷,上癮
?incredibly ad. 難以置信地
?intellectual a. 智力的,有才智的
?maturely ad. 成熟地,充分地
?violence n. 暴力
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】hundreds and thousands of...成百上千的…
【臨摹】Within a month, there would be hundreds of thousands of cases and hundreds of thousands of deaths.僅在一個月內,就發生了成百上千的個案以及死亡案例。
②【注釋】first and foremost 首先并且最重要的
【臨摹】He does a bit of writing, but first and foremost he?s a teacher. 他也寫一些文章, 但他主要是個教師。
③【注釋】get in the way of 阻礙
【臨摹】You should never let fear get in the way of you pursuing success.永遠不要讓恐懼成為你追求成功的絆腳石。
④【注釋】even if即使,縱然,盡管
【臨摹】Even if I had to walk there all the way I’ll get there.即使我得一路走著去,我也要走到那里。
思如泉涌
Lookers-on see more than players.當局者迷,旁觀者清。
The time of life is short; to spend that shortness basely, it would be too long.人生苦短,若虛度年華,則短暫的人生就太長了。